It was a great 10th birthday!
All my friends came to my tenth birthday. It was really cool that all my friends came to my birthday.
After the pools me and my friends were walking back to my house. We had a feed. After the feed we played hide and seek.
3 comments:
An exclamation is a great way to begin a "wow" introduction.
When I read your first few recount sentences I am a bit distracted by the repeating of some words. Perhaps instead of using "my friends" again, you could use the pronoun "they".
I'm glad you had a great birthday Jeyan.
Happy 10th bithday Jeyan! Did you have fun when you played hide & seek? it looked cool.
Happy late 10th birthday Jeyan
That was a very good animation about when you went to the pools for your birthday.What did you get for your birthday? I hope you had a great time playing with your friends. What games did you play? We are very happy that you had a very good birthday.
KEEP UP THE EXCITING ANIMATIONS!!!
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