Cruz has been trying to write an introduction which hooks in his audience, and orientates them about what he is writing about.
He has shared his recount introduction here with you.
While we were jumping up and down waiting to go to Maraiti Beach, my cousin was moaning and groaning. I thought it was going to be boring but it turned out to be quite an adventure...
5 comments:
Were you jumping up and down with excitement, as well as thinking your trip was going to be boring? I am a little confused.
I like the phrase "it turned out to be quite an adventure" it makes me want to read more about the adventure.
Miss Garden
Wow that was cool.I wish I went to the beach because that looks like fun.
Mary V.
Hi cruz
I saw your movie and it was great.
What Beach did you go to?
It must of been great fun for you and your family .
I well be looking ford to seeing your next movie.
Keep up the good work Cruz.
Aidan
Hi cruz
I saw your movie and it was great.
What Beach did you go to?
It must of been great fun for you and your family .
I well be looking ford to seeing your next movie.
Keep up the good work Cruz.
Aidan
Hi Cruz.
I really liked your movie about
you at the beach. What beach did you go to Cruz?
Well I am going now but keep up the good work.
From Aidan
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